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Eric Steven Raymond is on the top of my admirable person list. Several explanations will help you understand the reason why I have respect for him. First of all, he is a best teacher you can get. He has taught people by

his remarks (do you mean “lectures”)

and writings. For instance, he introduced the model of a good programmer, which is well known as ‘Hacker’,

in his book (article, essay))

writing (writing is too general)

“How To Become A Hacker”. This is the very classic essay of computer science from which many people get his advice.

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In addition, Eric Raymond has great passion for working, studying, and taking

an

adventures. Despite his hardworking, he has been putting his effort into ‘open source’ projects, which no one ever dares to do. Now, ‘open source’ projects are grown heavily and still growing. It is of course impossible without him.

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However, the most respectful part of him is his good sense of making a breakthrough in the area of software engineering. As it were, he is a man of insight. He has not only knowledge of his own major but also of sociology. Additionally, he is able to think philosophically. With all of these, he has written

the

great works. Whenever I read his masterpieces, I am surprised by his vision.

Very well done – You have written an interesting paragraph.  Actually, your writing style is very creative.  You really try to use complex sentences.  You make a few structure errors but they are all good mistakes because they will improve your writing

I look forward to reading your next assignment

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kaistizen:

몇개의 부적절한 단어 선택이 맘에 걸린다. 2004/05/25 00:35

행복괭이:

내가 보기엔 아주 훌륭한데;;; 2004/05/28 11:16

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